Curse

Lady Raenef · Aug 15, 2008, 05:58 AM // 05:58

Seeing the troll's face made me laugh on the inside because it's ugly. It needs moar funneh.

Donovan Cyclonus · Aug 15, 2008, 06:07 AM // 06:07

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Originally Posted by Lady Raenef

Seeing the troll's face made me laugh on the inside because it's ugly. It needs moar funneh.

I actually want it to be serious, but have light humor here and there so it's not a boring read.

Tzu · Aug 15, 2008, 09:44 AM // 09:44

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Originally Posted by Donovan Cyclonus

I actually want it to be serious, but have light humor here and there so it's not a boring read.

It doesn't seem like you want it to be serious to me, and apparently not to the Lady neither. I think you need to make it more clear which direction you want to go. If you want this comic to be serious, you need to lay out a proper plot plan and make characters with some depth to them. You shouldn't be able to laugh at the character's actions unless they're doing something deliberatly funny, and if they are you should be able to twist the plot back to serious more or less effortlessly so that the "funny" doesn't seem simply stupid, or takes the attention away from the actual plot.
If you want there to be a lot of "funny" in a serious plot, it should be delivered through sarcasm and/or a darker sense of irony and intellectual narrative.

I think you've got the visuals down so far, you've made the writing legible and the screencaps are good. It's all nice and clear and easy to read.
But, as I said, you need to pick a direction. I for one would love for you to make a serious storyline, but it's quite difficult compared to making a comedy in which you don't nescessarrily need a storyline at all.

Sjeng · Aug 15, 2008, 10:53 AM // 10:53

You're improving with the layout. Text is much better now.
You don't have to say "I am blablabla, bringer of light, bladiebla" every single comic you know ^^ people get the idea after one shot.
I'm still missing a clear storyline. You should think of a story first, then go shoot pictures.
Oh, and mind your grammar ^^

otherwise, good work.

Donovan Cyclonus · Aug 15, 2008, 05:23 PM // 17:23

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Originally Posted by Sjeng

You're improving with the layout. Text is much better now.
You don't have to say "I am blablabla, bringer of light, bladiebla" every single comic you know ^^ people get the idea after one shot.
I'm still missing a clear storyline. You should think of a story first, then go shoot pictures.
Oh, and mind your grammar ^^

otherwise, good work.

I am actually kind of doing that to develop Eros to prove thats he's pretty much went insane on how much he wants revenge on evil. And I do have a serious storyline plotted out for this comic.

Thank you.

Donovan Cyclonus · Aug 15, 2008, 06:18 PM // 18:18

sickle of carnage · Aug 15, 2008, 10:31 PM // 22:31

Lol, atleast the quality increased.

KoKoS · Aug 15, 2008, 10:42 PM // 22:42

em... i think that that's a feathered bow and not a long bow ^^
correct me if i'm wrong...

good job,

but i rly prefer oggycheese videos xD

Donovan Cyclonus · Aug 18, 2008, 07:59 PM // 19:59

made this out of randomosity. I don't know what to do. I am getting to much of a mixed reaction over the internet. Some people want me to quit. Some want me to make it funny, and some want me to keep going.

Benny10 · Aug 22, 2008, 05:49 AM // 05:49

It's all interesting and fine.